Tommy, that is great that you added an attention grabber to start off your pitch. That way audiences will feel empathetic immediately by placing themselves in the scenarios you have provided and take that feeling along through the rest of the pitch. Your projection and annunciation was great. Maybe try writing out your pitch first to avoid stumbling, but other than that, great job.
Hey Tommy, I liked the professionalism of this video. The attire and setting was appropriate. I also liked how you spoke eloquently and at a nice slow pace. The attention grabber was nice and I just recommend adding raising your voice a little more so that your words can be heard more clearly. Lastly, the pitch was rather short, I recommend that you extend by another 10 plus seconds by including an ask. Keep up the good work!
Tommy, that is great that you added an attention grabber to start off your pitch. That way audiences will feel empathetic immediately by placing themselves in the scenarios you have provided and take that feeling along through the rest of the pitch. Your projection and annunciation was great. Maybe try writing out your pitch first to avoid stumbling, but other than that, great job.
ReplyDeleteHey Tommy, I liked the professionalism of this video. The attire and setting was appropriate. I also liked how you spoke eloquently and at a nice slow pace. The attention grabber was nice and I just recommend adding raising your voice a little more so that your words can be heard more clearly. Lastly, the pitch was rather short, I recommend that you extend by another 10 plus seconds by including an ask. Keep up the good work!
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